In trying to reduce word count, I first look at all the little words.  Are thy all necessary?  Especially when several small words are together, there is usually a way to say the same thing with just one word.  Can any sentences be combined?  (This, however, will usually increase the reading level assessment in case that is a factor.)  Often you can cut a word or two just by "flipping" the order.  For example, if you were going to say, "You can reduce obesity by eating less",  saying, "Eating less reduces obesity." reduces the count from 7 words to 4.  We always want to get as much information in as possible, but it isn't possible to say everything we would like, especially with such a restriction.  Are there sentences that can be dropped completely and still get the most importantpoints across?

Here are a few suggestions:
instead of:
There is substantial evidence for the importance of feeding babies as they were biologically designed to be fed. (18 words)
how about:
Substantial evidence supports the importance of feeding babies according to their biological design. (13 words)

instead of:
Recently, several studies have indicated that breastfeeding is one of the important factors helping us in the struggle against obesity. (20 words)
try:
Recent studies identify breastfeeding as an important factor in reducing later obesity. (12 words)

For:
Because breastfeeding is a physiological part of infancy, as well as motherhood, it supports normal development of all the body's systems. (21 words)
you could substitute
As a physiological part of infancy and motherhood, breastfeeding supports normal development of all body systems. (16 words)


Without this normal developmental stage, babies are more susceptible not only to illnesses in infancy, but also to chronic illnesses such as obesity, diabetes and high blood pressure later in life.  (31 words)
could be replaced by:
Babies who miss this normal beginning experience more illnesses in infancy and increased chronic illnesses including obesity, diabetes and hypertension later in life. (23words)

These would reduce the total by 26 words (not up to the 60 you need to reduce, but progress).  Good luck.

Winnie

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